ext_313141 ([identity profile] hollie136.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] steins_stories 2010-05-28 04:59 am (UTC)

Wow, move over Janni! If this is what's been occupying your creative muses, let them at it! Not a cock in sight, but damn, hot, hot, hot!

The build up, the climax (literally), just got me all wound up, but then this 'As she opened her eyes, the disappointment hit her again.' nearly broke my heart. Even though she's accepted the fact that Bill will be nothing more than a fantasy, I still really felt her let down that his affections could be nothing more than friendly.

So well done!

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