Oh no, not obnoxiously teacher-like! I appreciate the help, truly. It is supposed to be more like the latter, so I will change it to Ein Traum, Allein. (Just capitalizing the A, as English do for titles. Do Germans not?)

Your explanation is really helpful. I've noticed that in German, there are commas where we wouldn't put them in English, so I've been a bit confused. My German is toddler stage at best, so. Thank you, Peki. :)